I believe this author can write way better and be more fun and interesting.\r\nToo many facts and too little description of the place the writer wish us to explore through the words.\r\nOverall I think the author can do better than this. The style is not consistent.\r\nParagraph 1 - too many facts and serious\r\nParagraph 2 - starting to be funny, yet not really unleashed the fun elements\r\nParagraph 3 - too many facts and serious\r\nParagraph 4 - Can be more casual and lifestyle.\r\n\r\nSuggestion: \r\n30% Facts 70% Describe the Fun that the author experienced before, Unique Selling point is missing.